Finished this script by Christian Cantamessa & Chris Pasetto.
I give it an A for originality. The world has undergone complete devastation. The survivors have been forced underground where they sleep in tanks, waiting for the atmosphere to become inhabitable.
There are two maintenance workers - Bauer and Cartwright - in charge of making sure the tanks are working properly. They are awaken periodically and perform routine maintenance before getting back into their tanks to sleep.
The situation turns deadly though when they can no longer trust each other. One of the tanks is damaged, meaning only one of them is going to survive. It quickly becomes a battle to the death.
I like the idea. I don't like the execution. There's not enough here to sustain a movie on the big screen. Also, I was expecting a big revelation regarding the survivors or the condition of earth's atmosphere.
The writers describe too much. Again, blocks of descriptions are the fastest way to ruin your script.
There's just not enough plot here. It's got a claustrophobic feel which can grow old fast upon the big screen. Plus, who are we rooting for? Without a clear-cut hero, it's hard for the audience to remain interested.
Needs another draft.
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