Finished this script by Jay Martin.
Story's about three guys who turn to a life of crime and attempt a robbery that goes awry with fatal consequences.
Jay Martin can write. There's no doubt about that. His format is smooth, his pages are fast. Script's an extremely easy read.
Unfortunately, if you take away his cutting backwards and forwards in time technique, there's really not much to this story.
Sam was a great high-school quarterback with everything going for him. A couple of years have passed though and we learn that he suffered a career ending injury. So he turns to a life of crime.
Are we supposed to root for him now? He tries to elevate from a low-level drug dealer to armed robbery. I guess it's supposed to be okay since his intended target is a crook but his brother dies in the attempt. Thus, it feels kind of hollow when Sam escapes to Paris with his high-school sweetheart, giving the script a happy ending it hasn't earned.
Sam is not heroic. He had other options. He chose to become a dealer. That decision should not be rewarded. Neither should this script. Jay Martin though is a writer to lookout for. Let's see if he can come up with a better tale next time around.
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