Finished this script by Sall Grover and Emma Jensen.
Script's about a bet between Isabelle and Luke. Luke states if a girl sleeps with a guy on the first date, the guy won't call her back. Isabelle believes that if a guy would call the girl back, he would get to know her and a relationship would develop.
This script is terrible. I'm still trying to figure out Isabelle's stance. How would she win this bet? Luke starts calling up girls that slept with him on the first date. So if he finds true love out of one of these girls, she wins the bet?
Grover and Jensen have this annoying habit of trying to get too cute in their descriptions. They fill their descriptive sentences with jokes. It slows the read down. Worse, some of the jokes are funnier than any of the lines in the script. They don't have enough good material to waste. Get the jokes up on the screen.
Of course Isabelle and Luke are in love with each other. I can't figure out why. The writers don't bother with that. Instead, they focus on this bet which isn't a hot enough topic to build a feature around.
Clunky dialogue dominates the pages. The entire script is "talking heads." There's nothing here to grab the reader.
Pass on the writers and script.
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