Story feels stretched. There’s not enough material for three acts. The key to a good plot is having the danger escalate. That’s the problem here. The dangerous situation presented doesn’t grow.
We have two medical examiners - LIA and ABE - working in the morgue at night. Three masked gunmen break in and force Abe to remove a bullet from a dead body. Turns out, the gunmen are cops gone bad and that bullet could send them all away for murder.
That’s the entire story. We never leave the morgue except for flashbacks that show how the murder went down. Since the danger doesn’t increase, the situation grows old fast, killing off our interest.
Worse, not only does Abe cracks jokes while they’re held at gunpoint, he also asks Lia out on a date. By having Abe act fast and loose, the story loses dramatic tension when the material is screaming for an increase in pressure.
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