THE PERFECT COUPLE

Hank Nelken is definitely a good writer.  His style is fast, his characters are identifiable, his pages are funny.

Script's about a couple - DAVID and SARAH LAFFERTY - and their relationship with their best friends BEN and VIVIAN.  The relationship is tested though when Ben and Vivian meet another couple - ELI and MAXINE - and start hanging out with them instead.

David and Sarah - jealously growing by the page - go to war with Eli and Maxine in an effort to win Ben and Vivian back.

There are two standout moments in the script.  The first occurs when all six go skydiving.  Eli and Maxine are pros and are able to pull off complex maneuvers with Ben and Vivian in mid-air.  David and Sarah try to complete their own maneuvers with horrifying results.

The second fall-down-on-the-floor-laughing sequence comes when all six are on ecstacy and David mistakenly thinks that Ben and Vivian are about to have sex with Eli and Maxine.  Not to be outdone, David and Sarah charge into Ben and Vivian's bedroom, promptly disrobing in order to have sex with them first.  Put Steve Carrell and Kristen Wiig in this scene and you'll have cinematic gold.

The problem with the script though is David and Sarah's relationship.  Their own marital problems have to be magnified.  Then, throughout the course of the story, we'll watch as these problems sink them.  It can't just be about them wanting to spend more time with their friends than each other.  We have to see why.  We've need to see the spark's gone out of their marriage.  Intensifying their problems will bring about bigger comedic situations.  The script needs to dig deep into marital problems and shine a light on all the conflicts inherent in marriage.  This way, audiences will relate to the movie more.