PRISONER 23

Finished this script by Cody Yarbrough.

This is a quick pass on the writer as well as the script.  Story's about a group that takes out a bus transporting a very special prisoner. 

When you write action, you have to understand, the real trick is to humanize the action.  The real reason why LETHAL WEAPON works so well is because we all understand and root for Martin Riggs.  Same as John McClane in DIE HARD.  Or Axel Foley in BEVERLY HILLS COP.  Sure the action sequences are great but they're there to support the story.

In PRISONER 23, the whole thing exists just for the gunplay.  The characters are cardboard at best.  Paper-thin.  They do not draw us into the story.  Thus, the story becomes boring in a hurry.  All the action in the world won't save you when that happens.