Finished this script by Anthony Jaswinski.
Jaswinski is a screenwriter. His descriptions are short. his dialogue is sharp. his pages fly when you read them. His scenes move bullet-fast. If you want to get your scripts past readers and onto an exec's desk, study Jaswinski's style. Having said all that, I have to pass on this script.
Story's about Idelle who comes to Europe with her boyfriend Paul. Paul proposes to her and the rest of the trip immediately goes downhill as it's revealed that Paul is working for the mob and has been stealing diamonds from them. The mob captures Paul and takes Idelle hostage.
There just isn't anything new or surprising about this story. It's a run-of-the-mill plot without any twists.
Are we really supposed to root for Marius after he inexplicably has a change-of-heart and begins helping Idelle instead of continuing to work for her captors?
The biggest problem is, nothing happens until Paul is kidnapped which is finally revealed forty pages in. That's way too long.
Looking forward to anything else Jaswinski writes.
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